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Words are superfluous. This is such a cool story that drags you in. Reminds me somewhat of one of mine some years back that was read on radio, 'The Red Dress', but way, way more sophisticated. Excellent job.
Loved this story. I was so desperate to see Fergus well and truly dumped I didn’t see the supernatural element creeping up on me till it was too late. Give me more.
A fun and interesting concept. However, way too much description of the characters thinking; this is heavily distracting and slows down the story. Also, an editor/proofreader would’ve been beneficial.