Stranger on the Shore

A lovely story about a first love which changes her life.

This is a good romance short story, with accurate and believable characterisation. The twist in the tale was largely expected but still enjoyable. The beach descriptions are concise, with tight use of language. However, there are punctuation issues throughout, and this is the reason it gets a four rather than five star rating. Look at this sentence: 'Whitey bent down and picked up a shell from the fine white sand it was shaped like a tortoise shell with a myriad of stunning colours that glowed in the setting sun it was a stunning spectacle it was beautiful he handed the shell to me'. It's a rich sentence and a pleasure to read, but punctuation is missing and distracts from the experience. A proof reader or helpful friend will point these out in future work- sometimes we can be too close to a piece to see these insignificant but distracting issues. This was a good read and certainly recommended - romantic but realistically so.

I love the characters in this piece! Their relationship is believable. A very good read!