Hi Terry, I enjoyed reading this short. I wouldn't exactly call it a horror but it puts me in mind of those 'Tales of the Unexpected' plays that used to be on the TV. I think this story would fit in a magazine, maybe Yours or Bella or something. Its entertaining and lighthearted and would fit easily there xx

Rather too close for comfort for this reader, a frequent customer of such establishments in the sixties. Nevertheless an anecdote well told

A nice short story with sudden and unexpected, but enjoyable, ending.

Nice twist ending. The dialogue seems very natural, but I did have a problem with placement - this couple must be in their seventies (or at least one of them) to have remembered the 60s and to my mind the conversation and turns of affection seem more suited to a much younger couple. If I had been prepared, I would have found it better realised.

Loved the descriptions, nicely contained. xxx

Hey dude, I just read your story and WOW my brain legit went into full cinema mode while reading, like I could literally see the scenes playing out lol. I’m actually an artist, and I usually do commissions for Webtoons, Comics, Manga, Character Art and Cover Art. And honestly? Your story as a comic or webtoon would be NEXT LEVEL! I’d be super hyped to bring it to life visually (no pressure at all, just thought it would be super dope). If you’re even a little curious or wanna check out my art, hit me up on Discord (eve_verse). Can’t wait to hear what you think abt the idea! Regards, Evelyn