The suitcase

This story is just so well written, with pace, tightness of delivery, and excellent syntax. In the main, it's set on the London Underground, and the author fully conveys the claustrophobia underlying the story and the anxiousness of its central character. It moves at a brisk pace and you share the character's underlying fear of her fellow passenger. But apart from his appearance, well-described as grimy and smelling of alcohol, as well as a suspicious suitcase, neither she nor the reader knows the reason for this fear. This is one of the hallmarks of a strong short story. You become increasingly unsettled as the train reaches its destination. I'll not spoil it but there's a terrifying twist in the tale. I have to say, in all honesty, that this story made the hairs on the back of my neck stand on end from the first sentences, and for a while after finishing reading it. Great to see such an effect delivered in what is quite a short short story! Message to author: more of the same please!

Hey there, Hope you’re having a great day. I just stumbled upon your story, and I gotta say, it’s amazing. Your writing really stands out, and I kept thinking how awesome it would look as a comic or webtoon. I’m a paid commission-based artist who works on comics, manga, webtoons, character art, and cover art. Honestly, it feels like your story is made for that kind of visual format, and I’d love to work on something like this with you. No pressure at all, I just think it could turn into something really cool. If you’d like to check out my work or chat about it, feel free to reach out on Discord (ava_crafts). Regards, Ava