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Boudicca and Mavis
by Kerrie Noor
Pages: NA
The tale of a dancer waiting for a chance. A short story of a woman's ride throught the streets on a horse, she wants attention, she wants adoration but what she gets is a different story.
Reviews: 2
The tale of a dancer waiting for a chance. A short story of a woman's ride throught the streets on a horse, she wants attention, she wants adoration but what she gets is a different story.
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John Neary
I found this story a bit long-winded, but I am used to writing very briefly. Also spelling could benefit from inspection
Malcolm Twigg
Lovely light touch, an entertaining playfulness, delightful dialogue and exquisite timing. The only things that really spoiled this for me was a lack of attention to spelling and punctuation and too much attention given to the 'flashback' section of the previous year's mishaps which could have been shorter and better realised: I had no idea who Nefertiti was when first mentioned and, being hidden from view at the time, her viewpoint of the fire extinguishing episode could not have been recounted as it was. Nevertheless, with some judicial editing this could be - and was - an entertaining little story well worthy of the humorous appellation.
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Kerriebdross@hotmail.co.uk
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