All a bit matter of fact. Short sentences, staccato dialogue. Sorry but I didn't really get anything out of this.

Comprised mostly of dialogue between two people, the author did not follow the *show, don't tell* principle*. There was no anticipation; anything the reader could've wondered, was told directly.

Hey! I just finished reading your story and I have to say, it was incredible. The way you write makes every moment feel so alive, it has a cinematic quality that’s rare to find. I’m a commission artist who creates comics, manga, and webtoons, and I couldn’t help but imagine how stunning your story would look visually. No pressure though if you are not into the idea, but I just thought I should put it out there. If you like the idea, you can reach me on Discord (eve_verse). I’d love to show you my work and discuss this further. Regards, Evelyn